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Here is a bit of advice/some things that were wrong with the SpongeBob You're Fired Transcript (this does not include grammar mistakes):*It is suggested that for any stage that is not directly with the character who has the line, you put them on a separate line. (example:

• SpongeBob: [Mr. Krabs walked towards him] Hello Mr. Krabs, this should look like this,
• [Mr. Krabs walked towards SpongeBob],
• SpongeBob: Hello Mr. Krabs.) Also, If the stage direction that is attached to a character is at the beginning of an episode then it should be included with the stage directions before it not the character, until the character says something.
• The "register window" is actually called the "order window". (or at least that is what it is called on this wiki)
• What you called "jams", is actually "crumples up". Note:"Jams" means something different. 
• Words like "a", "an", and "the" should always be used.
• "flyes" is actually spelled "flies".
• What you called a "desk", is actually a "counter", as in table-type of counter. Note: A desk is something different, it is a table like the one that is a Mrs. Puff's boating School (the ones the students use) or the one that SpongeBob used at home in the Procrastination.
• Try not to make things sound like something that it is not (example: "screws the hole in the floor and water drains.", this can sound like something very inappropriate.)
• Try to get all of the actions (example: "Comes again with box carrier", this should look like this "Walks away and comes back with a box carrier.")
• Although this is probably correct, here on the wiki, we like to call SpongeBob's "armchair", just his "chair".
• The arm of a chair is not the same thing as the back of a chair.
• What you called "bows", is usually called "lowers".
• What you called a "feeder" is actually a "food bowl". Note: a feeder is something different, a feeder is pretty much the container for any domesticated animal that is not considered a pet, it also applies to what you call the thing that is put outside for birds to eat from.
• You called something "Candids", which is used incorrectly. In one case, you called a "basket", a "candids cart".
• What you called an "overgrown beard" is actually called a "5 o'clock Shadow" or "5:00 Shadow" (they are the same thing), it is called this because it is usually found on men who leave work at 5:00 P.M.
• What you called "hugs", in this instance is not called a hug, I don't know what the official word for it is, that is, if it has a word in English, but what I changed it to "grabbing _____'s side"(the blank is whoever is being grabbed) 
• What you called a "aubergine" (which is called an eggplant in America), was actually a cucumber (which, if you don't know is what a pickle is before it gets, well, pickled, which means it is put into vinegar or brine and not taken out for some quite time). I know this for two reasons it had the same shade of green as a cucumber, also I'm pretty sure that no one who animates or at least colors the cartoon has ever seen a green eggplant. Or they thought that most kid haven't seen green eggplant. American usually only know about the purple kind.
• What you called 'Gary's Mucus", is called "Gary's Slime".
• If something is stated once you should not say it more than once (example: you kept repeating that SpongeBob has his "Best Day Ever" mug.)
• Do not put fading to black on a transcript.
• It sounds more professional if you use "exterior" for outside and "interior" for inside.
• Do not mention music unless it is heard by the character or is a lyrical song for that episode.
• Americans usually refer to a "Sausage" as a "Hot Dog", unless it is specifically mentioned as a sausage.
• You called "Senor Taco's costume a Burrito costume. I think you can figure out what it is actually.
• "Caries" has two "r"s in a row not just one.
• What you called a "ladle", the second time, the time when SpongeBob was making Snail Food, it is a "wooden spoon", not a ladle, a ladle is what Sandy used when stirring the mystery substance.
• What you called "etiquette" is (I am assuming you meant) a "label". Etiquette is a fancy behavior.
• What you called "pincers" is actually called "tongs" or "hot dog tongs"
• You wrote "smoke covers the screen that soon expands to show all four of them stretching SpongeBob by pulling his limbs", the correct way to say it is "smoke covers the screen that soon disappears to show all four of them stretching SpongeBob by pulling each of his limbs". another possibility is using the word "fades" or "clears". (You may also notice that I added "each of his" to "pulling his limbs", that isn't that important.)
•  If there are names for the characters use them instead of general words (example: use the names of the characters or as many names as possible instead of saying "Costumers"
• Squidward doesn't have arms or hands he only has tentacles AKA legs. (only with Squidward or other Cephapods, do not say something like "The Screen shows SpongeBob's tentacles", the words are not interchangeable.

I also forgot to say that the word "off" has two "f"s