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1. Give as much info as possible. (Example: Don't just write something like "SpongeBob slides to his garage." Write something like "SpongeBob slides to the back of his house to his garage.)
2. Don't forget end punctuation. This is mostly just period, but you will also have to use "?" and "!" in some cases.
3. If there is a new character, thing, or place that has not appeared on the show or is not a common item, you should describe it. This applies mostly to the first season, but it will apply with characters in the later seasons. (Example: Don't just write something like "SpongeBob leaves with a reef blower." You should describe the reef blower as well. It would look something like this "SpongeBob leaves with a reef blower. It is a giant backpack-like container with a blower hose, what looks like a jet engine, a power switch, and a pull starter."
4. In the 1st line you used the word "house", when it should have been "houses" because you are talking about three people's houses.
5. In the 2nd line you wrote "Stands Still", when it is supposed to be "Stands up straight".
6. In the 3rd line you used "expect", when it is supposed to be "except". "Expect" means to think someone should be doing or do something and "Except" means excluding.
7. In the 4th line, you used the word "shots", instead of "kick". This is a problem for 2 reasons (besides it being the wrong word). The 1st reason is that shots implys 1 of 2 things a gun is involved or alcohol is. The 2nd reason is that it is in the incorrect past tense form instead of the present form which is "shoots", the correct past tense form is "shot".
8. In the 5th line, you wrote "the outer side of it" (the window), it has a word which is "the rim"
9. In the 6th line, you wrote "resting in his net", when it is supposed to be "resting on his hammock"
10. In the 7th line, you forgot the word "in", making the phrase "puts in his ear plugs"
11. In the 8th line: 
    1. you wrote "via", this is not incorrect it is just better not to use it because some people might not know what it means.
    2. You wrote "two times", this can be shortened to twice.
    3. You wrote "blowes", which is supposed to be "blows".
    4. You forgot the word "a", making the phrase "causing a huge amount of sand"
    5. You wrote "get in the air" when it is supposed to be "is thrown in the air."
12. In the 9th line, you wrote "when a huge amount of sand", which is supposed to be "when the huge amount of sand". It is the second one because we know it is the same sand as the one SpongeBob threw in the air. You used the mistake again in this line when you wrote "blows a sand away". We know that it is the same sand from earlier so it is "blows the sand away". Also, there is no such thing as "a sand", it is one of the following: "a grain of sand", just "sand", or "the sand".
13. In the 10th line, you wrote "Squidward points his head into a leaf", which is supposed to be "Squidward looks at a leaf". The only thing that you can point your head into is a direction
14. In the 11th line, you wrote "causing grains of sand get in Squidward's eyes", which is supposed to be "causing grains of sand to get into Squidward's eyes". Although "into" can remain "in", it sounds better as "into" in this case.
15. First used in the 12th line, you used the phrase "small hills of sand" or "a small hill of sand", which is supposed to be "big piles of sand" or "a big pile of sand"
16. In the 13th line: 
    1. You wrote the the phrase "on it", instead of the phrase "to it", which is correct in this situation.
    2. You wrote "rewind", which is supposed to be "Reverse", because "Rev" means reverse not rewind.
17. Twice you used "cleans his hands" which is supposed to be "wipes his hands together", in this situation.