User:AW10/transcripts/Tea at the Treedome (transcript)/errors

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1. Remember, always start a sentence with a capital letter.
2. For the third line,
   • you wrote "himslef", instead of "himself".
   • "SpongeBob leaves telescope takes his jellyfishing glasses and net out", it should be "SpongeBob puts his telescope away and takes out his jellyfishing glasses and net,"
   • You assumed gender by writing "puts his foot close to her, then move his whole body next to' 'her". You should not assume gender if the gender is not obvious.
3. For the 17th line, you wrote "SponngeBob", instead of "SpongeBob".
4. For the 24th line, you wrote "...some giant rock", it is supposed to be "a giant rock".
5. For the 55th line, you wrote "SponegBob", instead of "SpongeBob".
6. For the 68th line, you wrote "till" instead, of "still".
7. For the 69th line, you wrote "comeon", it is supposed to be "come on".
8. Do not use contractions in the stage directions.
9. For the 75th line, you wrote "saty", instead of "stay".
10. For the 90th line, you wrote "When Sandy leaves the scene SpongeBob...", it is supposed to be "When Sandy leaves the scene, SpongeBob..."
11. For the 101st line, you wrote "..when he reach them", it is supposed to be "...when he reaches them".
12. For the 105th line,
    • you forgot to say which character was saying it.
    • you wrote "tired", instead or "tried".
13. For the 112th line, you wrote "...of the ladder", it is supposed to be "...off the ladder"
14. For the 113th line,
    • you wrote "SongeBob", instead of "SpongeBob".
    • you wrote "slurps", instead of "slurp".
15. Remember, do not use "we see".
16. Remember, for new characters, places, and things describe them.
17. For the 12th line, you wrote "stands...", it is supposed to be "crouches..." 
18. For the 17th line, you wrote "the giant's clam thong", it is supposed to be "the giant clam's tongue".
19. It is not "slapping with a hand", it is "karate chopping".
20. For the 40th line, you wrote "...jiggling on the ground", it is supposed to be "...flopping on the ground"
21. For the 46th line, you wrote "hopping", it is supposed to be "cart-wheeling".
22. For the 61st line, you wrote "unzooms", it is supposed tob "zooms out".
23. For the 102nd, 105th, and 106th lines, you wrote "them" when refering to the door. It is supposed to be "it" because it is singular.
24. When talking about liquids, you never use "a". (Example: You wrote "She drinks a tea", it should be "she drinks the tea" or "she drinks a [insert amount measurement here (example: sip or gallon)] of tea".)